Hey!!! Thanks for your comments guys…. M too glad that you guys like what I write ..
Thanks a million for encouraging… hope ye like the rest of my writing too…
——————————————–chapter 2—————————————————-
6 months back….. it all started here. The weather was getting clumsy. The arms of the sun were nowhere to be seen. The binds swayed in the blustery wind. The marriage hall was getting huddled with people. He stretched himself, and sat on the plumy velvet dressed chair. He kept toying with a juice glass. The last drop of lemonade hesitated to depart his smacky lips. He was in his full hand black casuals and an aquamarine shaded ‘addidas’ shorts. He was amazing. He turned deaf ears to his mother s call as a ‘santro’ roared to halt. People hasted out of the car, he saw a girl with a russet red top and a long bottle green skirt, through the re-arview mirror. The back of her sweater was tied to her neck. She looked gorgeous. Her hair was all tousled after the journey, her winsome smile was just enough a visual treat. She gave a chirpy pat on her pal‘s shoulder and brushed her little cousin’s hair and kissed him on his forehead. zushhhh!!!!! The ambulance bolted across the street shouting its usual kerfuffle she put a cross and prayed for that stranger. A moment’s horror.. a moment’s despondency all shown in her face. When she opened her eyes, he felt some godliness pierce through the hall. He locked her gaze…chills were served to all those people who entered just then. She placed her lip on the rim of the glass and gobbled it up gracefully. The fluid paced to destiny figuratively like an army rushing to save havoc, inside her throat. When all the others placed their cups beside and engaged themselves in mouthing some balderdash, her eyes darted screening the room. She took her cup straight to the dust pot and crushed a good bye to it. Their eyes met again and he felt a tingle invade through him. His eye brimmed with the untold frequency of unexposed furtive cordiality. As she brushed past him to the dressing room she pushed her stray piece of her hair behind her ears. Cute!! That was damn cute.. on her way back her fingertips happened to touch the corner of his shirt…. his heart skipped a beat!!!!
To be continued……………….
Arvind Jose said,
October 27, 2008 @ 5:36 pm
The dramatization is awesome! Continue writing
also, one suggestion:
Arvind Jose said,
October 27, 2008 @ 8:07 pm
The dramatization is awesome! Continue writing
also, one suggestion: your writing is great, but it will look much better if you start punctuating properly. Using ! instead of !!!!!!, . (or) … instead of ….., etc.
priyacheers said,
November 7, 2008 @ 1:34 pm
yea sure man…. I’l concentrate on those things.